Research #8 Stephen White

During my research this week, I continued to work on the assignment for Wednesday class. I have roughly completed 1500 words, so far and the focus on this section of the paper has leaned towards daily life in internment camps and providing information that supports the first part of my thesis, which is that terminology should remain the same, as internment camps not concentration camps. I have transitioned into the significance of sports and recreation (baseball and arts), to begin the support the second part of my thesis.

In addition, I have reviewed several new resources.  Daniel L. Dustin article “Baseball saved us”: Recreation as refuge in a world war ii Japanese American prison camp provided the different roles of sports and recreation in the prisoner’s lives at Manzanar camp, such as how these two provided some normalcy and stability.

After reading Citizen 13660, I came across a similar book with illustrations that provided insight to the daily life within these internment camps. Camp II Block 211: Daily life in an Internment Camp by Jap Matsuoka. I also started reading different interviews in the oral history project, Regenerations: Rebuilding Japanese American Families Communities and Civil Rights in the Resettlement Era. These interviews also provided additional insight into the daily lives of internment prisoners. Finally, I checked out Farewell to Manzanar, it is the true story of a families survival in these camps, that has be compared to the Diary of Anne Frank.

Luke Tomczuk Update #8- March 13th

This week was presented with good news and some not so good news. It started on a very good note, as I worked very hard to complete the outline and two paragraphs on Sunday night, a deadline that I missed back on February 27th. It was a grueling process, but now I believe my paper has the flow it had not before. The guide that Dr. Lowe posted for us was very helpful as well. I learned through completing it that my paper does not need to have the same structure in every section. What I mean by this is that not every research concept equates to one paragraph, but some can. It really depends on where in the paper you refer to and is subject to change as anything else. That will surely be a positive aspect going forward. On Friday, I completed a substantial chunk of the upcoming 2500-word draft. I am currently at 1218 words as of the time of this blog post’s submission. That word count could definitely be lower, and it feels good to be this far along with a few days before submission. It is a point I did not reach before the last assignment, and it is a sigh of relief that it has happened.

I wrote in the last entry that this week would be considered a working vacation. For this class, it was to an extent. The biggest disappointment was not reaching out to Dr. Nepa and talking about my paper. That will be priority #1 before my next update. I fully understand that time is of the essence, and now that Spring Break is in the review mirror that will become even more of a factor. His expertise will certainly be appreciated and will kick my project into higher gear. That said, I am not panicking about this at all. We are at a point in which there is still time, but there is just less of it than before. I will not fully be confident in my sources until I meet with him, but that does not mean I failed to track down any material. My easiest class, Urban Geography, has helped me complete this project more than I ever anticipated. Recently I saw a PowerPoint which contained a slide about redlining. I believe this to be an underappreciated piece to my cemetery removal equation. Both University City and North Philadelphia were red-lined; I was so intrigued by this that I included it in my outline. I plan to ask my professor how she obtained the map so I could use it as a primary source. On Friday I ran into a high school friend who works at the Historical Society. She told me a little bit more about their cemetery collection and the hours that it is open. She was not an expert but any information is greatly appreciated. For the coming week, I plan to finish the 2500 word draft and reach out to more contacts. Once that happens I believe I will be able to move along further.

Audrey Sorber Research Blog 7

This week, I worked on my outline and first two paragraphs, as well as found a few more sources I plan to use for my final paper. Doing the outline helped me to find any missing holes in my research, which I have been working on filling. I have done more research and found more sources to build my section on the Mao and Post-Mao period to show the differences between the two and how women’s rights were affected after the Post-Mao era. In the Mao period, I have highlighted the many rights women received and how these rights were written into the Chinese Communist Constitution. Both my peer-review partners suggested providing more background on the Mao and Post-Mao, because not many people know too much about them. Therefore, I have been working on editing and providing more information on these two periods and the differences between them. Some of the sources I have found previously, such as “Personal Voices,” have good information on both periods, so I plan to use that as a source for this section, as well as a few others I have found after I began editing the section. The outline also helped because it helped me form my main arguments and determine any information I still need to research. For example, I am still working on researching the women’s organizations during this period to show the impact that they had.

Research Blog 7



I was happy with the introduction I wrote for the Wednesday assignment and am looking forward to fleshing out the section. This week I intend on writing a line by line commentary of the Melian Dialogue. This will include an amalgam of three translations by Hobbes, Crawley, and Hornblower with pertinent notes about the differences and similarities and their possible meanings. In a sense this section will write itself as it is less original thought and more a combination of contemporary works. However this section will certainly be a lengthy one as I intend on putting down the entire dialogue. I thought a lot about whether or not the paper would be improved by including the full dialogue. On one end it allows for readers to understand the topic I am discussing in full. On the other it will make for a slightly dry section if readers are more interested in a summary rather than the raw text. In the end I believe it will benefit the paper in its ability to familiarize new readers, and point out interesting differences for more informed scholars.

As far as research goes most of it is in the bag already, but I will make an effort to find more contemporary sources as well. I have no secondary sources written past 2008, which is certainly a flaw in my bibliography. If I get through the introductory section easy enough I plan on rewriting my historiography which will create a better landscape of Thucydides throughout history.

Research #7 Stephen White

During my research this week, I completed my introduction and my outline. The outline has helped me stay on top of what I want to write about. In addition, I have updated my historiography section of my paper. I originally used two primary sources in this section but since then I have updated to two new secondary sources. As of late, I am having a difficult time organizing all my sources, I started out using RefWorks, but I have since abandoned RefWorks and I have misplaced a lot of additional sources. Organization and time management has been challenging for me lately, but these weekly assignments have provided an easy transition from one section of my research paper to the next.

Over this weekend I have worked on how I am going to transition from the historiography section into the first section of my paper. I want to focus and introduce how the Japanese prisoners spent most of their day. Providing the reader a basic understanding about daily life is camp is important before I begin to illustrate the significance of sports and recreation within these camps. I started my reviewing more interviews and finally finished reading Citizen 16066. The plan for the next 10 days is to complete the section of this paper about daily life within these internment camps and set up how I am going to demonstrate the importance of sports and recreation for the Japanese-American prisoners.

Luke Tomczuk Update #7- Spring Break

This week I was fortunate to have my paper reviewed for the first time in class. Since this was a busy week for my other courses, I could not bring in my outline and first two paragraphs on Wednesday. Therefore, I brought in my historiography instead. I first reviewed Michael Trudeau’s paper about the Battle of Britain. His topic is intriguing because it makes an interesting argument, that Hugh Dowding was the hero of the Battle of Britain because of improved radar technology. Drawing from skills that I learned in my intermediate writing seminar class, I told him that his paper could be better served with a bolder claim. It would be interesting to see if he can prove that Dowding was the hero of the entire war instead of merely suggesting it. However, it is his decision with what he wants to do with his paper. The other paper I reviewed was Nathan Davis’s paper about the Interstate Highway System. This is a topic I am extremely passionate about because I have always been fascinated with highways on a personal level and more recently in academic study. I like the direction of his paper; it has great potential. I regret marking up his outline like a book, but I wanted to give the best feedback I could. I plan to connect him with a source detailing how the Manhattan Expressway was stopped by famous urban activist Jane Jacobs that I utilized in another course. It was a source I used for this class in an earlier assignment. As for my historiography, my two reviewers as well as Dr. Lowe liked what I had. I will take the advice they gave me, especially Dr. Lowe’s point about neatly combining two historiographies, to heart.

While reviewing other peoples’ projects was satisfying, it was disappointing not getting the outline done on time. I just would like to do the best I can on this capstone, and completing assignments on time goes a long way towards achieving that goal. I feel fortunate to have the support in this class that I do, which makes this less satisfying. That leads me to my next topic: what I hope to accomplish over Spring Break. I hope to complete the outline and two paragraphs by the end of the day today. Then, I will email Dr. Stephen Nepa to hopefully meet later this week. I thought a good idea might be to chat at a set location that works for him. Whenever it takes place, either this week or shortly thereafter, I look forward to informing him on my topic and my progress to this point. As necessary I might visit other special collections that I mentioned in previous entries. A mistake I made in my historiography was not using a source Dr. Lowe mentioned called “Penn’s Great Expansion.” Depending on what I get from that, I will pick up more primary and secondary material from new special collections. Lastly, I hope to complete my 2500 word draft by the end of the break. I know this is an ambitious agenda given where I am now, but it is nice to have those two extra days next week just in case. Late on Friday, I renewed my hold for the two books being held at Temple’s Special Collections for me. I did not visit there this week, but hopefully this renewal will ensure visits after the break, which I am calling a working vacation. Next week I hope to have more updates with the significant progress I plan to make.

Research Blog #7 – Joseph Ganiszewski

This week I worked on the “outline and first two paragraphs” assignment. I had written a draft of an introduction paragraph some weeks ago as a sort of reference for the direction of my ongoing research. However, because the specifics of my topic have shifted slightly since then, the paragraph itself was largely useless for this assignment. In changing this introduction paragraph, I also changed my thesis statement to fall more in line with the refocusing of my topic.

I also heavily modified and formalized my existing outline. I found doing this the most helpful to me personally, because I had been feeling doubtful and anxious about the overall direction my research was headed: seeing a completed outline has made me much more confident and comfortable.

I have also begun working on the revisions to my historiography. One of the key notes I received from my initial draft was that I had not included any previous work that focused specifically on Washington’s 1793 Neutrality Proclamation. Because the assignment had been for five sources, it did not contain all of the sources I plan to discuss in the final paper. That said, it has been difficult to locate sources which focus on the proclamation. Thankfully, I have shifted my topic to more of a focus on the Democratic Republicans’ response to the proclamation, and how they were able to parlay the national debate around the proclamation into a key position of power following the 1796 presidential election. Because of this change of direction, the focus of my historiography has also shifted. Luckily for me, works on the early history and rise of the Democratic Republicans seem more readily available than works on the 1793 proclamation.

Research Blog #6

This week there was significant development in the continuation of the research as well as the writing of my project. I was able to do a significant amount of secondary source analysis because of the historiography section of the project. After hearing the opinions of a hand full of notable authors and historians I was able to grasp the position of which my topic is situated in the historic conversation. The opinions of the authors I used in my historiography were truly helpful in the development of my arguments, thesis, and I think the overall outcome of the final project. Following the completion of my historiography and reading I did for the portion I decided to continue reading, dedicating most of my free time over the weekend reading primary sources. I plan on visiting the special collections portion of the library tomorrow to check in on a box that I’ve requested. If what I’ve been told about the particular box is true I should get a considerably larger amount of new primary source material accounting the social situations surrounding the development of urban highways in the Philadelphia area. Following this on Monday I plan on beginning the next portion of the project that is due on Wednesday, I’ve been brainstorming this portion of the project and I can tell that this is when the most development and structure of what my project will happen. I am definitely at a point in my research where I’m getting comfortable with the materials I’ll be using as well as the topic itself and therefore I’m very content with where my project is at this point in the semester.

Blog 6 – Jonathan Rachlin

In order to prepare for this week’s historiography assignment, I spent time figuring out what exactly has been said about Jewish basketball in Philadelphia in the past.  Since the topic is pretty narrow, it was initially hard to get a broad picture of dominant questions and arguments within the field.  However, rather than zero in on Jewish basketball specifically, I decided to expand my secondary source range to the broader topic of Jewish sports in America.  Surprisingly, a fair amount of literature exists, mostly authored by scholars of history and/or religion.  The Jewish athletic historiography is not huge, but comprehensive enough to include differing focuses and opinions.

Harold Ribalow’s The Jew in American Sports, Jeffrey Gurock’s Judaism’s Encounter with American Sports, and Steven A. Riess’s Sports and the American Jeware three works I came across in the past two weeks that have contributed a lot to my research. Although I still intend to focus on Philadelphia’s Jewish basketball history, expanding the source material has helped advance my research.  Many in the field tie athletic participation to ideals of assimilation and belonging, which is what I initially tended to study.  As of now, I’m not entirely sure how I’m going to put together the expanded literature with the history of the SPHAS, but hopefully I’ll be able to match events and trends identified in Jewish American sports history with the chronology of the team.

Research Blog #6

This week was an extremely productive one for my paper.

I started to put in double research time in order to prepare for wednesday’s assignment. In another class of mine, History of Global Soccer, we began to discuss the World War II years of the sport. This is where I learned of the Balilla Youth organization in Rome. This group was basically the Fascist boy scouts, promoting all young boys to engage in sport – whether it be soccer, rugby, fencing, or wrestling. I have been working all week from that class’s textbook, The Ball is Round by David Goldblatt, and it has proven extremely valuable to my paper. Goldblatt covers the history of the sport of soccer in general, so I’m hoping that by going through his footnotes, I can find more detailed sources regarding Fascism and soccer.

Now that I have a clear vision for the paper, the outline and thesis seem less intimidating. They will still require a significant amount of revision, but I am confident that the assignment will create a sturdy spine for my paper.

I found another primary source that is architectural. It is another building associated with the Olympic Forum in Rome, a fencing building that displays the myth of Icarus on it. Mussolini’s government approved architects seemed to play with mythology in their work, and I want to research their motives behind that.