During this week I completed my presentation although it was brief I believed that I provided a general idea of what I did my research paper on. As for polishing up my research paper, I feel that I should address that there were 3 different generations who were interned. About 80,000 were Nisei (American born Japanese with US citizenship and Sansei (their children) and finally Issei who were immigrants born in Japan. In all my drafts so far I haven’t included this important statistic, I am planning on incorporating somewhere in my introductory paragraphs or after my historiography. Also I would like to add more to the last section of the paper without stretching it too much that it seems I am adding words just to hit a specific
In addition, I am still working on adding notes in footnote area, this is new territory for me as I never added notes in any of my previous papers and I am feeling anxious about getting the structure correct without added too much information. This weekend my plan is to read each page of my paper out loud and attempted to work on polishing up one page at a time, with the hope that it assists me correcting some mistakes I have made.
Finally, since this our last blog post I wanted to thank my classmates for all of the suggestions about my paper, you have been extremely helpful with improving my paper. Also thanks for making an older student feel welcome, it’s been tough spending some of my afternoons with students half my age. Finally, thanks for all the congratulatory words after the birth of my daughter. Enjoy the summer. Stephen